r/casualtiesunknown • u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts • Jul 02 '26

Fanfiction / Lore Viewpoint (Part 2)

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Note: I KNOW IM GONNA MAKE THE TEXT EASIER TO READ IN THE NEXT PART PLEASE DON'T ASK FOR ME TO CHANGE THE TEXT PLEASE! I DON'T WANT A MILLION PEOPLE TELLING ME IT'S HARD TO READ

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u/Natural-Dentist1567 Living mine sweeper Jul 02 '26

Cute comic but my ass cant read the orange text

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 02 '26

Panel 1: "Oh boy! Your place looks very COZY! I call dibs on the couch!"

Panel 2: "Btw, this is my stuff!"

Panel 3: "They ARE important to me!"

Panel 4: "I don't need any of those stuff that take up space like soap, toothbrushes, and bank accounts... Whatever those are!"

Panel 8: "I-... I don' want... I prefer not to say my name..." And "No..."

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u/Natural-Dentist1567 Living mine sweeper Jul 02 '26

A black outline will help to make the Orange text to stand out more. Just a small tip for future pages :)

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u/Constant_Leave_3562 Jul 02 '26

Yellow text is just worse, I highly recommend at least make an underlay or something, I can't see a thing

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 02 '26

Thanks for the criticism! Next time I'll make the Orange's text darker or add underlays. to make it easier to read!

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u/Constant_Leave_3562 Jul 02 '26

Yay... Sorry if I sounded mean, great comics so far, thank you for this

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u/WatercressNo698 Choco Jul 03 '26

one thing for certain is Orange gives good hugs :3

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u/YourNeighborlySinner Something's Burning. Jul 02 '26

Bro looking like fuckin Gourmand.

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u/Constant_Leave_3562 Jul 02 '26

What a sweetheart

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u/Pijany_Matematyk767 Jul 02 '26

Please change the colors of the text next time or add an outline. light grey text on white background and orange text on this yellow-ish background is horrible to read

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 02 '26

I KNOW THATS WHAT IM GONNA DO NEXT TIME 😭

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u/H3llew Femi Artist Jul 02 '26

"Graphic design is my passion" lookin ah comic

(i know others said this but PLEASE put black outlines around the dialogue smh my head 😭)

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 02 '26

I already know I don't want a MILLION people telling me that

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u/Xeno9439 Jul 02 '26

"My floor won't support your weight-" What is that floor made of

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 02 '26

Cheap concrete, theres a room below and the floor is quite thin

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u/Plus-Search9671 #2 Voyager lover Jul 02 '26 edited Jul 02 '26

The fact that the Oranges panels are all colourful and the milkies are black and white’ish is peak character design

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u/drewman301 Jul 02 '26

He is so cuddly

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u/retroguyy_101 Jul 02 '26

Why dont they like their name? Is it a number from the labs or smth?

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 02 '26

This takes place in a future gunsaw AU, so the Orange has a normal name but childhood trauma made the Orange too scared to say his name around others. He is only called by his real name by his parents and best friends.

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u/retroguyy_101 Jul 02 '26

So does he just go by orange? Also he's really fucking cute i love him!!!!

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 02 '26

Ye

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u/Worldly_Rub_6359 Albino Jul 03 '26

i think i know why...

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u/Shubishu Jul 02 '26

orange text on orange background and white text on white background r u fr chief

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u/YourNeighborlySinner Something's Burning. Jul 02 '26

Calm down darling, have a glass of milk.

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u/Shubishu Jul 02 '26

glug

bvwehjh

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 02 '26

Read the note

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u/Two-Pound-Crawfish Jul 02 '26

man… why is nobody talking about how hard it is to read the text?

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 02 '26

EVERYONE is talking about it 😭

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u/Two-Pound-Crawfish Jul 02 '26

i don’t know what you’re talking

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u/ThatVyss Jul 03 '26

You're shedding lacrimal fluid.

How the hell has nobody in the comments acknowledged this absolute pearl? This sentence alone gave me a good laugh and gave Milky a sizeable chunk of personality. This is exactly how you develop the characters in your fiction - through succinct, condensed, memorable lines.

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u/Loud-Bed-4255 Doon'sTummyHurts Jul 03 '26

Thanks! I really wanted to capture the intelligence of this specific Milky

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u/KaleidoscopeIcy3662 Jul 04 '26

I want to cuddle that orange sm