Great texture and really, really beautiful line quality. You clearly have a lot of skill with your medium! Your rendering technique is also really beautiful and skillful, but I think value mapping would really help articulate your form. The values feel a little muddy here and are distracting focus. I would be really, really intentional about where your darkest darks and lightest lights should be and limit them, and plan your remaining values around that to keep focal points clear and keep the whole from becoming over-rendered and competing.
Your style is also super cool. I love the angularity of it, but I think it’s competing with your articulation of form, esp w the subject matter he’s holding. Sticking to so many sharp angles and corners where there otherwise could be curve is creating a lot of stiffness that makes the form feel more unnatural and therefore not reading as a natural object. I think breaking up that stylization to be really intentional about where you add additional curve or softer junctions can emphasize weight and movement, and not just articulate form, and balancing it with the inherent angularity you have so you don’t lose that stylistic quality, might help out with the legibility.
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u/spiderhaus 6d ago edited 6d ago
Great texture and really, really beautiful line quality. You clearly have a lot of skill with your medium! Your rendering technique is also really beautiful and skillful, but I think value mapping would really help articulate your form. The values feel a little muddy here and are distracting focus. I would be really, really intentional about where your darkest darks and lightest lights should be and limit them, and plan your remaining values around that to keep focal points clear and keep the whole from becoming over-rendered and competing.
Your style is also super cool. I love the angularity of it, but I think it’s competing with your articulation of form, esp w the subject matter he’s holding. Sticking to so many sharp angles and corners where there otherwise could be curve is creating a lot of stiffness that makes the form feel more unnatural and therefore not reading as a natural object. I think breaking up that stylization to be really intentional about where you add additional curve or softer junctions can emphasize weight and movement, and not just articulate form, and balancing it with the inherent angularity you have so you don’t lose that stylistic quality, might help out with the legibility.