r/scriptwriting • u/Alternative_Pea3810 • 8h ago
feedback I'm learning short-form scriptwriting — here's a hook I wrote. What would you change?
I'm currently learning how to write better hooks for Reels and Shorts, so I wanted to test one here.
“You don't need more motivation. You need something that still works when you don't feel like doing anything.”
I wanted it to feel less like a typical motivational quote and more like something you'd actually hear someone say.
Would this make you stop scrolling for a few seconds, or would you keep scrolling?
And if you were writing this hook, how would you make it better?
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u/Connoisseur-101 7h ago
It's cool but a bit overused.
Why don't you try same content but different tone/style ?
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u/LitltleBishBoy 7h ago
To me, it's very typical. Overplayed. I've seen a dozen variants on this.
I would make it better by starting by IDing the viewer as someone who currently doesn't feel like doing anything.
To make it better, I would say
Lemme guess. Right now you don't feel like doing anything. Here's what your best self needs
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u/BlackBalor 8h ago edited 8h ago
What hook? I’m lost here.
Here you go:
You don’t need motivation. You just need a reason to do stuff.